The background context and info on what caused so much discourse about Hillary Clinton is very well written. There is a complete lack of which articles you are using which is an easy fix, just introduce each article as the others have written in. I would replace any pronouns involving yourself providing opinion, to just becoming a statement into the article. For example, instead of I think this was a strong article;write this is a strong article because/due to… This paper is not supposed to have your bias to be written into the paper, but rather the bias of your sources. As this is an objective assignment not subjective. Next, If you also have an article that is writing basically only facts, and is devoid of an actual argument. Then add the evidence in said article to give the reader an example and insight into the article. I would possibly add also the sources for the data or the ethos behind the author compiling this raw numbers. The second paragraph has a very good quote, but it also a very long quote and may seem just like a word filler for intents and purposes. I think you did very well in summarizing all three articles, especially the third, by putting insight behind each process of the advertisement and breaking it down. This just being a rough draft it’s alright you didn't put a conclusion but just add that to summarize your thesis using the three articles with what discourse happens. Overall very well written paper.
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