blog endnote 2

This paper is really solid. The lack of fluff or any bs in a topic that could easily be filled with. As the others said this paper is very good at being straight to the point and concise. The introduction gave a very straight forward yet interesting description of the topic and issue you chose. I would give more quotes or evidence for each of your sources. You would list that people would say something but then not show evidence or an example of said thing. Very good insight on authors using ethos in showing celebrities/athletes supporting Kaepernick. The third source is probably the best paragraph in the paper as it uses a powerful quote and imagery. It is transitioned to very well from the introduction. As a main argument against Kaepernick is that it insults the soldiers in our military and their service. The paper’s conclusion while being short is very straight to the point like the paper, however I would possibly give a little summary of the paper in the conclusion. This is mostly due to your paper being very short compared to the requirement, even though this is just a rough draft. You’re still missing out on like 500 words which is about another page and half. So while the paper is concise it needs more examples and evidence/ possible add a more in depth summary of the article to give a more complete feel. Overall a very well done paper and follows the prompt very well.